Shattered Destiny: Chapter 1
Hi everybody, so this is the first chapter of my story. It’s raw and unedited because I’m kind of too lazy to go through and looking for spelling errors or whatever. Please forgive me.
I’m scared of what you guys think, but please don’t hesitate to review. I’d like as many opinions and critiques as possible. The first few chapters of this story will be quite boring because I’m just easing into the plot. Please take the time to take a little peek :)
Summary: Alyss Karlsonn is now 16 and going to live with her brother, Zen, in the smallest and richest town in the middle of nowhere. She never knew her parents except for the fact that they died when she was very young. Everything she ever knew changes the moment she meets Simon. A fantastical world of faeries, dragons, werewolves and other creatures becomes very real when her destiny to become Queen of Adela is shoved in her face. Then come the dreams. The dreams about a past life in Adela, where she’s the young princess living with her mother, father, Sebastian, and Esca. But she doesn’t remember any of this. Is it real? Or is it a trick that the other competitors in the Dragon Games have forced upon her. This is a tale of a lost princess battling her right for a throne she’s not really sure she wants.
Okay I’m going stop here because this is turning out to be a really crappy summary but yeah. In short, it’s about this girl who discovers she’s next in line for the throne her mother “abandoned” and now she has to compete with her dragon against all the other species for this throne. Along the way, she has dreams about a childhood sweetheart, Esca, and her supposed brother, Sebastian. Nothing is as it seems.
This is pretty good, although it does need some work in terms of general grammar edits and flow. I could help the same way I did with the other stuff, too - I like this and want to see it as good as it can possibly be!






